I love the sarcasm and name calling. Reminiscent of Leia and Han. Great world building.

Exciting moment with lots of sci-fi details that don’t go so obscure as to be non-understandable. Nice job with the tension of the moment as well. Great entry into what is turning into one heck of a tight race of a challenge.

Great scene you paint there – full of action and fast thinking, accentuated by the futuristic tone.

Challenge Critique: This should be thrown in the space-compactor and disposed of. Who writes this garbage? There’s no way this is winning the challenge. []o)

Very, very fun read with plenty of excitement to boot. I also picked up a Han/Leia kind of vibe.

Great pace and dialog! The choice of scene is excellent: it’s simple enough so that the reader immediately knows what is going on (hero is under fire, trying to get away) while hinting at a larger story behind it (who is after the hero? who is the Empress? why is the droid malfunctioning?)

I am looking forward to reading the sequels.