I really like this, you had some gorgeous use of language, I especially loved the phrase “a five lane gauntlet of shiny cars and traffic perfume.” However, if you seperated it up, it would let your lovely prose breathe a little! Having it all in one lump made it a little hard to follow.
I really like this, you had some gorgeous use of language, I especially loved the phrase “a five lane gauntlet of shiny cars and traffic perfume.”
However, if you seperated it up, it would let your lovely prose breathe a little! Having it all in one lump made it a little hard to follow.
JayDee