Very taught, emotional little piece. Great job painting the scenario and then hinting and alluding to what was about to happen. The sentence that starts, “This was a house of violence…” could use some work. It feels like a run on, and there is a missing apostrophe or two, which make for a hard read, disrupting the flow of your narrative. You might even be able to get some dramatic effect by breaking this apart into paragraphs or even separated out sentences. Lots of potential that just needs a bit of polish.
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