Sounds like an interesting D&D character there. I like the details you give us about Ramar’s journal. It makes me think of classic D&D modules

I should not have skipped to the last line to read it first.

Nicely set up as this tentative start at journaling. I could have done without the parenthetical references to places. They felt more like cues to D&D players than narrative elements, like footnotes.

And yeah, killer ending line, pun intended.

nicely done! the block style looks daunting at first, which is why I was tempted to skim to the last sentence too.. but I didn’t!! I did read it over twice to make sure I didn’t miss anything in that long paragraph. i love that he noticed something in his trainer’s journal, learned that not all men below him in rank are shallow. :)

I love the way the character speaks, not a dialect, I don’t know what to call it. But I can hear him talking. I love this, I wish I could write in this style.