_“MegaCorp killed my parents,” Fetus announced as if it were the weather forecast.

“And I was MegaCorp’s first experiment.” Acrylic declared._

WHAM! I love the way that reveal came out.

Grr…formatting failure…

I agree with Abstract. The whole scene is an amazing, gorgeous visual, with these two odd characters under the glow of some crazy energy dome calmly announcing their reasons for revenge. Love it!

Love the reference to the red shirt ala Star Trek. The deadpan announcement from Fetus is great, wonderful description.

I loved the detail about the bronze gate, made from pennies and worth half the city, but you had me at “magnetic shielding”.

I loved the red shirt reference. This is some world you’re building.