Mother Rose and the Garden setting are both stolen from the lovely and talented Jessica Cahill.

If there’s anything that conflicts with your creation, please just let me know and I will fix.

Hurray! The only small thing I’d add to this is your character’s name. That way someone could write a sequel should she choose to. ;)

If’n you want, put it in a note in the challenge, so you don’t have to stuff it into your well written fic. :)

Great start! You pulled me right in with the first line. Looking forward to reading how this develops.

One spell correct: independence

Great start! I didn’t see that ending coming and am eager to find out what happens to the protagonist now that he is burdened/freed with the infromation Mother Rose has given him.

I find it discomforting that the narrator refers to the flower as an ‘it’ – but I think it helps develop the character’s deadpan and analytical inner voice.

I think there are some adjectives you could cull: ‘somewhat’, ‘actual’ and particularly ‘always’.

Thanks for the encouragement guys! This is quite a challenging subject to write about for me, but I’ve had the idea knocking about ever since I saw what Mother Rose’s power was.

@BARomero
Thanks for spotting the typo! Fixed!

@Sanglorian
Thanks for the pickup on the excessive use of “always”. As for the “actual” and the “somewhat”: I think they work where they are. It helps shape the character’s voice.

“He was male” spoils the ending of the sentence for me and the punch of the twist. However, now that I look at it I certainly could be wrong. The protagonist has his faults, but he certainly doesn’t think of people as objects.

Hmm. I’ll come back and make a decision later.

A twist , I like. Continue , please.

Good twist ending. Well written and conceived.