she didn’t notice that he hit a red minivan? that it needs body work? What mom doesnt’ notice these things??
P.S. I’m not really sure how these two parts go together, this and the previous.. You need to expound a little more on the tension, the why, and draw the connections in a little more. I was thinking the one guy was shaken up, but here he is calmly eating and avoiding the topic. Give him a pale face, cast a few glances, make them not touch the salt shaker at the same time, something!

Here, I changed the title and sent you a note. My thanks for the construction.

okay, so now I see that the previous one was a ‘fast forward’. :) Now it seems more of a style choice to insert it here. You are setting us up for a story about a guy who can see his future. Can he change it though? :)