I’m ambivalent about the use of simile and metaphor in your piece. Sometimes, as with the wafting weeds, it really works. Other times, like when the room is ‘dipped’ it seems strained and unfitting.

Overall though, you paint a very clear picture.

I don’t think it’s possible to ‘ascend the limbs’, because they’re not being climbed; they’re being climbed on.

I think my fellow commenter hit the high points, with which I agree. Lots of good stuff here, just done to the point where it wraps back around to being vague.

I agree. I’ve edited it quite a bit, as well as the rest of the series.