all I can do is wince

I just don’t think any other words will do

that bad?

I’m assuming the ‘wince’ is for the predicament rather than the quality of the story?

I think it’s a well thought out progression – the one word that I didn’t like was ‘appealing’ in the penultimate paragraph. I’m not sure it communicates what it is supposed to – although I’m stumped for an alternative because I think it’d be hard to pin down exactly what it is you do want to communicate.

i think “appealing” fits in the same way that food can look appealing. The progression works. almost begs for a sequel

I used “appealing” the same way I’d used it in the initial paragraph of the story. Yes, the same way food can look appealing. Ultimately, she didn’t want men to look at her that way, like a piece of fruit ripe enough to eat, though, in the end she did still look “appealing” to some. She couldn’t escape it.

Brunette less appealing? Puh-shaw. Just for that I should rate this a 1 out of 5. =P

This is a pretty interesting stream-of-consciousness piece (in that it kind of runs together), but I think it may have worked better as a series of diary entries or something. Though that would have probably added to the length.

You used the word “the” a few times in the second to last paragraph where you probably meant “they.” And a line break between paragraphs would make it easier to read.

Other than that, enjoyable piece. Sad that this isn’t so far removed from a possible reality.

Thank you.
Yes, I do that often, I’ve edited – and as for the line breaks, this story is pretty much on the dot the character limit, I’m afraid.
Also – regarding the brunette statement, I agree with you, but you must know what I meant with all the ‘blondes are easy’, ‘blondes have more fun’ stereotypes!