There’s a lot to take in here, so I hope you explain a bit in a sequel or prequel! The sparks and the pendant need some elaboration, I think.

I have a hard time reading in Present tense. It feels like I have to do all the work. But you did a good job with this one.

Didn’t even really notice the present tense, so must have been really well done. Definitely lots going on, but felt mostly like a lot of possibilities. The middle got a bit muddled—hard to follow exactly what was going on, but not egregiously.

Thanks for the feedback! I may do a prequel to explain some of the stuff here.

Folds? Magic or science fiction? or both?