The perp had led us down every back alley and side street in this whore of a City. I really liked that line! Also, I don’t know if this is what you intended, but this made me laugh really hard. Also, I think you could do more with exposition, although its pretty clear what’s going on but it seems something is a bit off with the why. And near the last part I’m not sure who’s talking.
laughter is definitely what I was hoping for, this and a lot of my other stories (with the exception of “In Sickness and In Health”) are written as jokes
Skull Enthusiast
Jermaine Champagne
Lone Writer
Lone Writer
Skull Man
ElshaHawk (LoA)
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