Okay, some helps: Maybe “She felt she shouldn’t be here, among those who have passed. It’s not safe yet; whoever caused this is still out there.”
2nd paragraph: that or the star, she doesn’t have it, so she can’t say this. Take out That in the beginning of the next sentence. maybe: “She felt it meant more than anything,”? At the end, a period after veil would be better than a comma. I got confused as to whether the person could cross over to both worlds or not.
Great ending, and you really took this into a direction I had not thought of! bravo! I love when ficly shows you a new possibility in the collaboration of others!

You’re right about the confusion; I made some tweaks and perhaps it will fix my mishandling of the two character.