gasp! will he live?

This seems like a really interesting story, but as I progress, it seems too little time has been spent in each scene. I don’t believe this is a problem with you, I think it is a problem with Ficly itself. Trying to tell a longer story is difficult if it has to be taken in tiny bites.

I’d like to see this more developed, sometime, though I don’t think ficly could contain it.