Too much repeated at the end, and the commander raves to nobody, which is pointless. I think we get it.. he’s not going to let himself be embarrassed.. let’s just talk about the two who uh, teleported?

I’m starting to get a little bit on an Escape to Witch Mountain vibe out of this story. I agree with Elsha that the last bit is unnecessary. One thing that concerns me is that you tend to rely a lot on dialogue to convey the story. Often in an action story when people are doing a lot of talking they’re not doing much else and it slows the pace of the action. Try to be more economical with dialogue. Define your characters more by what they do and not what they say.