“He once saw a waitress stagger after reading his lines, written on his receipt like bullets sprayed onto a firing squad wall; “Rose are red, black and blue; when the light’s just right, I see the real you”.”

Fascinating, truly fascinating descriptions. You manage to paint so much color into so little space. Wonderful work.

dark and brooding, this man needs some love.. :)

What a great character portrait. I hope the other entries for this challenge are this good.

Minor grammar nitpick: it’s “the reader’s.”

I liked this. I think it would have been better to leave the poem out: describe the reaction and let the reader imagine the kind of potent words that could have that effect.

I agree, it would have been a bit more mysterious leaving the poem out. Not a whole lot of “fire power” in that poem. []o)

Hey congrats on the Feature, 32, and welcome back!

This is amazing. “Twisted braid of words that usually left someone with a painful throbbing headache that rhymed…” I love that sentence, it’s so totally unique but paints this detailed picture that you can’t miss.