Chaos theory! Hope that wasn’t something important, but then, it always is. I am wondering what the thing is that heard it?

…and the bowl of petunias thought, “Oh no, not again.” Sorry, that was the first thing that came to mind. :)

This is a very mysterious and haunting piece. It took me a couple reads to absorb it, but now I more or less get it. There is some great word choice in here, like “it snuck along the edge.”

I wasn’t expecting the droplet to become a character, because I knew it would disappear quickly. ‘It thought’ and ‘it felt’ for two sentences. That perspective change turns this piece on its ear. I felt all askew! I think that is why people will give it a 4. However, I love that you have focused in on a minute detail and made it all matter. “The air parted around the droplet, smoothing the way for its fall. It spun, just slightly, the bottom of it undulating calmly.” Great wording on the details.

A bowl of petunias indeed! Very nice catch, Garsecg. I was hoping somebody would figure out the chaos theory bit (nicely done, smdasilva), but I wasn’t expecting anybody to figure out the Hitchiker inspiration.

Thank you for the wonderful comments!

Loooove the last line. So captivating!

“The droplet misses the ground, however”- I would remove “however”, it kind of interrupts the flow on that paragraph. Overall though I dig this piece. I love the line “hours past genesis” as well… couldn’t tell you why, but it’s wonderful.

I love it when I read something that I don’t understand at first. There’s so much blandness out there and it’s good to see someone channel their inner Aronofsky.