Interesting… An abandoned kitchen? A naked, headless figure with an edge of panic and a clumsy streak?

Your writing is quite solid, and I love that your details all match up with the plight of the poor wanderer, like the line “…the sound infuriating to anyone with ears.” Despite not knowing who it was or where it came from, you managed to me care about the headless body.

I did find the second paragraph to have some slight pacing issues, and I’d take a look particularly at the first and last sentences. I think it’d work better if you broke them up a little bit differently.

That last line is so sad. Poor lost, headless creature.

Thanks for the comments/crits, Miles.

I think its cause they kind of just run on a little too long and hug some short sentences in between. Sounds wierd. But when I try to break up the last sentence of that paragraph it just sounds really frigid. No idea.

This is just another reason why ninjas should be outlawed.

Seriously though…
Miles hit on the pacing issue already. Overall I feel you tried to be a little too clever in your presentation of this story. Starting off with a slow, cluttered kitchen scene, then in the next paragraph juxtaposed it with the chaotic dance of a naked body. Without a sequel or prequel, it seems to go more for the shock factor only.