I held onto this enough, it’s as good as it’s going to get without input.

Input?

It’s really good. I was initially going to complain that you don’t make it clear the dog is being put down, but then I realized that I realized the dog was being put down.

I don’t know if you need the phrase “I always loved that.” because it’s not terribly descriptive and it’s already sort of implied; there might be a better way of expressing that.

Your right. I changed it to “That always made me smile, it still does sometimes.” The phrasing there needs some polish, but I think it adds another element.

I was shooting for subtlety. You getting it but not realizing that you got it is just about perfect.

Ohh noo, sad dog stories!

The touch with the tail is perfect. We called it the “full-body wag” with my dog.

You do a great job of writing this piece with emotion, but without anthropomorphizing her at all. You might want to change the capital "M’ in “I buried My face…” since I’m pretty sure it snuck in there. The only other suggestion I have is to change some of your commas to semicolons in one or two places, since the ideas are distinct but interdependent and it might make for a smoother read. However, it might just be a natural part of your narrative voice.

‘Seymore’ is the best tag ever.

Very sad, and I thought the whole subtle approach worked well and was fitting for the material. As aware as we are of things, sometimes it’s more comfortable to keep them just at the edge of consciousness. I think the writing mirrors that here: you don’t come write out and say it cause the protagonist doesn’t want to fully think it either.

A simple idea executed very well, exactly what ficly is for. Since you mentioned you were reworking that particular sentence though, may I suggest just “That still makes me smile sometimes.”

Very nice subtlety. You could feel the stuffiness just building as you read.

I edited again- some punctuation and capitalization issues, the smile thing.

Any more thoughts?

Practically perfect in every way as it stands right now, I think.

Now I’m glum. Thanks.

I’m guessing the semicolon edit lostsalient suggested has been done because those semicolons all up in there are doing a great job at the moment.

I think the pace is nigh on perfect. “…this kind of thing always confused her” is horribly sad.

My favorite line: “how she always thought company came to see just her.”

I understand why the dog’s eyes are mocking the narrator now, but that’s more in the owner’s interpretation of events and context, yes? To me, there’s just a hint of implication that the dog is actively mocking her owner. Or maybe I’m just nitpicking.

Thanks for the sigh-inducing start to my day.

The whole thing is very much from the narrator’s perspective- note the extreme anthropomorphism in the first paragraph.

If I ruined your morning, I think I hit my goal.

That totally bummed me out. which is to say, congrats on writing an excellent piece. I really wanted to give the narrator a hug at the end.

Am I the only one who reads this as a bestiality piece? I mean, I know it’s about a dog being put down, and that’s sad and all, but nobody else even sees it a little?