The meter and rhyme is loosely based off of The Raven. However, due to the character limit, and my complete and utter lack of skill, it’s not quite right. I tried really hard though. I’ve been working on this for 3 days, so hopefully somebody gets a kick out of it.

That’s hilarious.

I picked up the Raven rhythm right away, so that came through.

really classy ;-) the raven metre was good.

Not only do I love the way that you’ve not only managed to fuse classical poetry with a tale of drunken failings, but also that you’ve started it with ‘Dear Penthouse’

Thanks. I felt the “Dear Penthouse” was very important. Many times when I struggled with the character limit I would delete it to gain 15 characters or so, only to inevitably put it back and work harder on the actual prose. I did have to remove the comma though.

haha..! Definitely a knee slapper. Was it sausage pizza..?

The tempo works for me, I thought it was great. I especially love the ‘online order 10.24’, and ‘over bent a porcelain god’.

I think the use of ‘rapping…tapping’ and such might be a little redundant, as most of us who have heard/read the raven would be familiar with the tempo alone, and those who haven’t probably wouldn’t understand the reference.

I don’t know, them’s my thoughts.

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This is really good Johnn, both the idea and the execution.

And the “dear penthouse” is sheer genius, although I do not think that any submission to the penthouse forums would have been honest as to the true conclusion of the events, as this one is in the second portion :-)

Dude…this was genius. I loved every line. Rhythmic, rhyming poetry is very challenging. Doing it comedically is damn difficult.

5…nay…7 pencils!