A few apostrophe errors, hearth’s, cave’s, you’re.. but those aside..
Here you reveal the relationship to the dark witchy hermaphrodite. This now seems like a Mel Gibson movie, tricking us with horror on the outside and then revealing the luxury inside. I love it, I really do, just it seems he must offer her something for the favor he wants her to do. He didn’t bring anything? That’s what I am missing. Someone sequel this and add in a bribe she cannot refuse!

I mean, tell me you added one! (it wasn’t sequeled when I began my comment, heh)

@Elsha: thank you, I wrote too fast. I corrected the mistakes, give me all you got, I can take it!

Really steeped in lore and magic, which is awesome. The hermaphrodite thing was unexpected, especially coming off the ‘half brother’ line, so nicely played there. And might I say, bold choice making your “self” in the narrative somewhat sexually ambiguous.