Comments on Sir Tad of Winslow by Tad Winslow

Paulthev

Poor dragon. Alot of visuals
- Posted over 8 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
THX 0477

Cool scene, and a dramatic entrance into the challenge indeed. I love that he claims to have slain the dragon while in truth it only lays mortally wounded. That darn dragon never really dies, does it?
- Posted over 8 years ago.
Krulltar

Somehow I expected an epic poem for your entrance, but this is cool none-the-less.
- Posted over 8 years ago.
ElshaHawk (LoA)

Nice play on the spelling of selfishness for the dragon’s name, I smiled. I hope Sir Tad has enough stamina to begin the tournament! He seems a bit worn down. Perhaps a ficliteer from the line would not be so stoic, overcome peer pressure, and aid him.
- Posted over 8 years ago.
someday_93

The last sentence is perfect… I especially love the imagery of an “eroded soul.”
- Posted over 8 years ago.
Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

I love the drama of the piece. I was both admiring and pitying the drunken hero.

That said, the end feels sort of … wrong? You know I think you’re awesome, but it feels out of place (which I know sounds feckin’ WEIRD considering it’s what the whole story is about). It may just be me, but I feel like the last line should be about the old knight rather than the poor wounded dragon.

…PS @THX I don’t mean to contradict you but mortally means fatally. As in, he gon’ die …
- Posted over 8 years ago.
Tad Winslow

I failed here in multiple ways. Not only is the dragon gonna die, but in the last sentence, that meant it does die. Drunken was supposed to describe the way he moved, not that he was actually drunk. And I thought I’d made it about the old knight as it also ends with his applause rolling out across the land. Wait, who are you calling old!?

But i appreciate the honest in depth comment. Good way to start the tourny ;)
- Posted over 8 years ago.
smdasilva {LoA}

My only problem with the story is that no one helps him. Are we all so selfish and proud that we wouldn’t come to the aid of a comrade in arms (or pens)?
- Posted over 8 years ago.
Sir Bic

I feel it, man.

For me, this isn’t the story of a knight that slew a dragon. It’s a story of a man, surrounded by inaction – because of the egoism in others – that has the courage to do away with his own, personal “dragon” of selfishness. Though the battle within is difficult, he overcomes his own self-interest in the end.

The allegory of it all is awesome!
- Posted over 8 years ago.