I agree, it is a bit shaky. The transitions aren’t exactly smooth, and as of yet the plot has been a bit flat. However, I also think that you have a pretty good grasp on what you imagine, and with the right words could get it across more easily and eloquently.
Overall I love the idea of the romantic twist, and who doesn’t like a woman who’s a revolutionary…a strong woman with determination to a cause is awesome.
But I do have few suggestions…
first off the hyphen instead of quotation mark makes it hard to get moving into the story. You don’t need the reader to have to stumble throught a story, cause it takes them out of the moment you are trying to create. Use quotation marks for dialog.
Also, the use of “ly” adverbs is a big no no when writing fiction. Google “fiction writing tips” and 99.9% of the websites suggest getting rid of “ly” adverbs when writing fiction. Now Stephanie Meyers and JK Rowlings have made a fortune using them, but it only goest to show you need a really compelling story to overcome the adverb flaw. Everyone from Mark Twain to Stephen King suggest you get rid of them.
Now I agree with Mo that it’s a bit shaky, the dialog seems canned. I would have liked to been told more of the revolutionary cause, then to get the techical details of how to fix her computer. Also, when she says “Why did you help me? We don’t even know each other…!” conficts with the first sequel where she ask for his help. She asked for his help and he did. Right?