time and space travel? nice hat!

Haha, the tone shifted dramatically at ‘Blarf’. Very funny. Welcome!

Somehow i invision dick van dykes character from mary poppins….chim chim charoo!

Something very ‘Doctor Who’ about this entry. I do hope you’re not making a comparison… because nothing could compare…! (goes starry eyed).

I love all the thunderous imagery in the first paragraph. It kept me hooked to the last.

Still, I feel like one sentence kinda stalls the piece mid-flow:
It made a “Blarf” noise and disgorged a tall, thin man, then disappeared.
I don’t know if it’s the Blarf that worries me, or the disgorged, which doesn’t really mesh with the flow of the rest of the piece.

PS, I too love the hat, but nothing beats a fez.

I think winds ‘lash’ crowds rather than ‘lashing at’ them.
It’s a dramatic introduction for a worthy contender, and I think Lady Pandorica is right that it has a Dr Who-esque vibe.

Great visual, and I like the contrast between the portentious entrance and his unsteady, hesitant question. Fun, fantastical entry into the challenge.

I also got the Dr. Who vibe. Someone like Tom Baker perhaps?

Thanks, Sanglorian! I have made the change.

I wasn’t intentionally going for a Dr. Who vibe, but I can see it now. I will take that as a huge compliment!

Doctor who? []o)

The narrative here reminded me more of a Mark Twain tone and a modern telling of A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court. (especially the hat trick)

Regardless of its style, I think I speak for us all when I say: I hope to read more!

It made a “blarf” noise. Love it. That whole sentence, actually, I love the image of a man being disgorgerd from the blarfing hole… haha.

Niel gaiman vibe for me. Serious in tone till hes spit out onto the field. Monty python and willy wonka are what my mind conjured up.

Thanks to Someday…93. I cant get “blarfing hole” out of my mind ;)

Haha, love it! A great introduction for a powerful protagonist that doesn’t take itself too seriously.