Great description of the violence and tumault of falling down a hill. The ending was awesome, giving context, character, and potential for more story all in one little line.

For some reason I thought of the nursery rhyme “Jack and Jill”. I can see someone describing Jack’s tumble in a more realistic fashion and this fits the bill.

But why would Jack (or your MC) want to poison the whole village?

“I was suspended on the edge of eternity.” Love that line. I also loves the last line, gives us a little more insight into the character… this sets up for what could be a cool story, maybe even inviting prequels.

wow, i get the feeling this person was pushed, with the revenge at the end. I was sure they could not survive those injuries, i was wondering how you would end this, and you took it in a direction I was not expecting. You are getting good at that!