Ooh. One trip you’d wish you hadn’t taken… I like this little snippet. I feel like I’d be more frantic, but everyone’s different. I’d be Kate I guess, trying to reach back. Natural disaster can be scary.

Nice take on the East Coast’s current events!

I like it, but as it is, I am not able to answer why that is. Like Someday said, it seems like this is a small part of a larger story. It’s well written, but perhaps a bit rushed. It appears to me that you have written too many characters – saying too much – too quickly.

Such is the bane of Ficly. I felt it would be better to indicate the number of people involved and give the reader a sense of the character spread, in case I decide to continue.