ugh. in trying to edit this i apparently re-posted it… sorry :(

Keeping quiet can be more hurtful than saying what you have to. Sometimes it’s hard to realize that though.

I love the small, almost insignificant thoughts that show how distant she is from everything, from him and the conversation and the world.

I switched the last couple of lines around. I don’t know if it makes a difference.

Painful moment, but really effectively told to portray the intentional inattention to avoid confrontation and feelings. I like the bit about the ant.

There’s a quiet desperation here and something strong that keeps them together, like a huge elephant in the room that needs badly to be pointed out. :)

The sentiment is nice but the structure seems sort of off. I’m not sure why the character’s prompt is needed. Is it a screenplay? If so, why the break after each “Me” line? I don’t know, maybe it’s just me. []o)

I do agree with Doc though, the ant thing is a wonderful description of youthful inattention.

Superglue prison, This is a really junction of words.
Also, I agree with Sir Bic, why is this setup as a screenplay?
But besides that, this was a good read.

Congrats on the feature! This is quite nice, I just have to echo what everyone else commented on. I think the screenplay type thing works here.

I wrote it like this to really emphasize that she isn’t saying anything. I don’t know, maybe it doesn’t quite work…

I like it, a lot actually.
I like how it’s the opposite of fighting but just remaining quiet.
I’d really like to know what happened to her and him to end up this way, the story line is different but in all possible good ways.

i love it! silence can sting more sometimes. the screen play format does put emphasis on her silence and i think thats cool =)