Will no one comment on my story?

puppy dog eyes

Oh, witches. It took me a bit to follow what was going on. I think it felt vague somewhere in the list of defuse things from which she’s drawing in power, and then the ambiguous ‘they’ which made it sound like the animals and fish were also closing in on her. I get the ambiguous ‘they’, but just the placement made it a bit odd.

Great job on the drama side of it and laying out the stakes involved in your tale.

Left a comment, as you can see above, and wound up putting a sequel after maximumridge36’s, just to keep the story going a bit more.

Power, magic, I get it, but i did not get the feel that she was hunted FOR it. Had to read the tags and comments.