I like it but..

What?

first off, sorry for the loss of one you loved. This ficly was waxing poetic too much for my taste. This goes against most known rules of fiction writing, but I feel this tried too hard to “show” what was happening.

first off, sorry for the loss of one you loved. This ficly was waxing poetic too much for my taste. This goes against most known rules of fiction writing, but I feel this tried too hard to “show” what was happening.