The mother saying “again” in referencing her daughter’s “allergies” hit me. Crying is not a rarity in this family. That’s a good, subtle, economic backstory.
The “mother knows best” line struck me as unnecessary, since the rhetorical “right?” suddenly makes it seem like the narrator is questioning the reader.
Thanks for the feedback. I see what you mean by the last line. I originally had it written a different way, and you know how when you write something and then edit it there are those little things you think are jewels? That was one of them.
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