Very bizarre. Seems to be arranged kind of like a poem, but it’s not consistent enough. That made the format distracting, like why there was a comma in the second line. A neat idea and some cool visuals, but the execution didn’t quite do it for me.

I got the sense of delirium from this. the staccato and fragmented speech aided the confusion. Something clearly bizarre is going on here.

Oh Elsha, you’re suspicions are correct…stay tuned. =) THX, I intentionally started it out with the poetic yet fragmented pacing, but it wasn’t something i wanted to force myself to continue throughout. There was a different style i saw as being most effective given his experience. It was supposed to come across as though he’s telling us the story as a real-time recollection.