reality is nothing like we imagine it, is it. just a little nitpick…“its family” should be “his family”

Very sad, all the hope and then pfft, the air is let out of the balloon. Nicely told to build that up then puncture it rapidly and effectively.

Did you mean ‘his’ instead of ‘its’ in first sentence of the second paragraph?

Yep. It was an edit I missed. I also capitalized T in tiny, not that anyone was bothered by that.. :)

Love the title, and I agree with the others that the story really conveys the disappointment Cree feels.

If I could make one suggestion: you say “she had to let him go see his family in some other country” but what if you gave us the name of the country?

agreed. I just wasn’t sure what to pick when I drafted it!

Elsha;

I love how ambiguous this is, totally open for a sequel. I’m up for it. Let’s see if they blend together, that’s my new goal for sequels.

I love how all it took was the word ‘trudged’ and a few immediate lines of dialogue and I already think Greg is a jerk. I need to learn that sense of quick characterization.