It sounds at first like the budding artist trying too hard to be deep and tortured. Then by the end you show what I was going to say anyway, that it’s in there already, just waiting to come up and out.

Yeah, I was going to sympathize with you tortured artist vibe, then you threw in the twist of life moving too fast and being focused on one person. I remember those feelings now, restless, but also happy, ready to move on but wanting things to just pause for a moment so you can breathe. I had forgotten those times. I had forgotten the sweet sort of torture they made.

Well I am not a pro writer myself, I only aspire to be one, one day.
Anyways, this isn’t bad. I mean there’s definitely a lot of detail that can be put in this writing. I would definitely have to agree with THX 0477 because you do seem like you’re trying too hard to be all pained, the feelings happen for everyone so describe it more! It’ll be way easier and less wordy if you throw in detail. You will be surprised how much it transforms your writing!