That was very sad. I was waiting for you to screw up the present tense and slip in a past tense, but you didn’t so that worked fine. A nice job at a little slice of life, a solitary moment that hints at past and present.

Sad, but accurate. I agree with THX.

Like a lottery ticket you keep checking over and over and over and over……..

Oh well this is just a wonderful slice of sad loveliness. Very nicely written and good job telling a story in such a short piece.
Abby x

really good job conveying her emotions, i’ve felt the same way before