I like the fact that he wants to punch him and wet himself at the same time :)
I’m going to try and write a sequel for this, problem is I really have no idea why he’s been kidnapped.

That makes two of us, but it’s the joys of being on ficly :D

Ooh, I’m mad at ficly. I had a very long comment that just got ditched when I tried to post it. I’ll try to redo, but my apologies if it winds up terse.

First, great job on the panic and emotion coming through very effectively. Some writing style and grammar critiques as follows, since you’ve asked for lots of feedback.
1. Italics are for internal thoughts, titles, and emphasis. These statements should just be in quotes.
2. The comma in the sentence about the bottle coming out of the pocket makes it seem like the bottle is big enough to hide a shotgun. Also ‘pulled’ might be better replaced with ‘emerged’, otherwise the sentence looks like a fragment.
3.Since you’re writing in omniscient third person, “…maybe it was his gag reflex,” seems out of place. Maybe instead, “…feeling like the penultimate gag reflex.”? Also that clause shouldn’t be in the present tense.

[Took two comments to fit it all]
4. The sentence starting, “Don’t worry kid…” is a run on and should be broken up.
5. “Holding hands…” is also a fragment, which could possibly work as it is, but I think it’d work just as well as a clause on the tail of the sentence before it.

I know that’s a lot, but you did such a good job with the emotions and story progression here. Good potential—just need to work on that spit and polish.