A return after “loony shack” would be nice.

I read this from the beginning and couldn’t stop. It’s a great example of how one small story may not make sense and a full read is necessary to bring it all together.

I really enjoyed this and didn’t have to back track to confirm information, I was able to retain it all through the series.

And what a sweet twist, your protagonist practically goes crazy when he finds out he’s not, nice element. And you end this too with a new beginning. I like how you tied up the loose ends and set a simple stage with your last two lines. Nicely done. I’m looking forward to more.

I like it, nicely propelled the story forward. I’m pretty sure that raw oropharynx line could be a first for any work of fiction :)

You’re forcing me to come up with more of a reason for his situation. It’s like story chess. I’m on painkillers for an ear infection atm so we can either blame or thank them for whatever sequel I come up with, ha!

So we are splitting up? Could be fun!

@32.
Oh yeah, this will be fun indeed. I’ll be one busyyy typer with you two ;)