Very spooky and just right for the month of Halloween. Great job staying in the moment and keeping consistent with the present tense as well. I’m not always a fan of present tense, but it seems to work well here.

Grammar nitpick: Sentences with a conjunction between two complete subject-verb pairings need a comma.

OO nice job! :D
Love the title too.

Curious, quite a villain you have made, and a character that can see this villain. Can others see him, too, or just your character?
fix: “an asleep patient” should possibly be “A sleeping”.

Thanks guys, edited the story and fixed the errors. :) And the character can only see the villian.

Sequel please =). This is very imaginative, and evokes many questions. Great use of present tense (unlike THX it’s my favourite). I think it adds suspense successfully.

And it seems that I’ve missed all the error fixing so I shall just say nicely done!
Abby x

Featured on your first story! Go Madi! If that’s not a Ficly Welcome, I don’t know what is!