Nice rhythm! The half-rhyme fits well. Good stuff.

I really like how you put a word and then you continue to write what it means in this story that you’re trying to tell.
The words are minimum but I think that’s the best part and of course you were probably going for that as well.
Super good. I feel inspired by this sort of, I may post a sequel but not to this story but just as inspiration if it’s okay with you! :D

Go for it! :)