Hrmm, this was all exposition which isn’t as fun to read as action and dialog. It’s a fun scenario, but I think you would have been better served leaking out such details in the course of action.

Yeah, I debated. I thought two quick exposition pieces will allow the rest of the story to unfold with more speed and action without being bogged down too much…a chance for them to be snappier but still get some important back story. Much more show than tell coming up.