My brother loves Minecraft…Sorry, just thought I’d mention that.

I like the rationality that you’ve injected into this. And, although many may disagree, I think the repetition of the “he” adds to the structure and builds up to the final line.

Nice use of humour, and I love the subtle spookiness of line 5. Better light them torches!
Abby x

I’m not sure I would have gotten it without Abby’s comment, since I have not played minecraft. It’s a cute look into the mind of a video game character.

“I bid this place Overheater”

Did you mean I dub this place Overheater? Or is “bid” used in a way I’m not familiar with.

I love it!