I would prefer this piece if it was separataed into paragraphs where you enter a new line. However, this is merely cosmetic. I think you have a couple of unnecessary commas in it that you could hunt down if you want. The story is very sad, dialogue very real and emotive. Your imagery is also very good. Abby x
I would prefer this piece if it was separataed into paragraphs where you enter a new line. However, this is merely cosmetic.
I think you have a couple of unnecessary commas in it that you could hunt down if you want.
The story is very sad, dialogue very real and emotive. Your imagery is also very good.
Abby x
Abby (LoA)