The weapons were in a story I entered as a challenge, I’ve thought about them a lot, so I wrote this so I could write about them more.

Hahaha this is really creative!

Hmm…I think I just worked out that your favourite genre is sci-fi. Sorry…I’m a little slow. You keep coming up with these original, if a little freaky, concepts. Keep em coming!

Your imagination is brilliant. Do you have to think about this stuff or does it just pop out? I’m intrigued!

Right…The Bolt Whip line was so clever it made me laugh. Nice use of Bold…it always brightens up a piece. Appreciate your spacing – really makes it easy to read.

The third paragraph ddin’t make sense to me. Maybe the first comma should be a semi-colon.

I love the process of distraction in the main character. You should do a series. Some development here would be great.
Abby x

Now it’s left to you to write a fight scene. The weaponry sounds downright Burroughseque…