Weird.
Thanks a ton, I hate the dentist.
But mine isn’t um…psychotic.

You would think this dentist would have gotten bad reviews and a bad rep??

All I’m thinking is that the line that says the boy murmured no, no. I don’t wanna.
I think the line needs to be in quotes because he was saying those things, but maybe that’s not correct on my part.

anyways, this was an interesting read!

And just when I’d persuaded myself to get a check-up!

I love that you leave the rest to our imaginations, focussing rather on the build up. Poor kid…I really hoped that the dentist genuinely needed space. It would have been a cute twist if his intentions had been entirely honourable. Hey, I just thought: what if dentists are aliens that knock us out and then probe us? Now I’m really afraid!

I agree with Infinity about that sentence though. “The boy’s mumbled protests faded into silence as the anaesthetic did it’s work,” is how I would put it.
But still…lovely bit of freakiness.
Abby x

Haha, thanks for the comments, guys! This was mostly an attempt to write Bradburian horror, but it didn’t work out too well because I ended up having to cut most of the descriptions. Anyway, about the boy’s words: I left out the quotes because firstly, I tend to leave out quotation marks for dialog that’s small and weak and that I don’t want to emphasize, and also I ran out of characters. I see what you both mean, though – I’ll take a look and try to squeeze in the quotation marks. :D