Ahhh I wonder what it’s about! Such an engaging poem. I read it three times before I felt I could comment. Something new comes out each time. Beautiful thing is beautiful.

I hope you enjoy puzzling us! I think my brain just exploded. I agree with PJ … this really draws you in, and requires undivided attention.

I like your structure. The whole poem is very surreal. I would suggest punctuation to make it easier to read but I guess that would defeat the purpose.

You need an s on the end of thousands. Last two lines of first para and first two of second are my favourites…the break in the middle is well placed.
Great read.
Abby x

Thanks for the kind words!

Mmm. I already told you about this, but I like this piece. Quiet, subtle, and thoughtful.