Errh… Not sure how I feel about this. I’m a little rusty. But I’m going to keep at it… All night if I have to! Because I really want to finish NaNo this year.

You should be proud of this! It’s very honest and emotional, as all your writing is. Sad and beautiful at the same time. Love your use of hyphens in the second paragraph. Also, the pause in the last line makes it tear-fetchingly poignant.

And good luck with NaNo…I can’t believe I just found out about it. Everyone seems to do it but me =(
Great to have ya back!!!
Abby x

Another fellow NaNo participant, yes! Good luck, hopefully we’ll meet each other at the finish line.

As for this, I loved it, really. I must admit, the hyphens and sentence breaks did throw me off the first time I read it, but upon rereading it I thought it added to the emotion somehow. It’s a very strong piece, with a lot of feeling. The last two sentences in the second paragraph are definitely my favorite, but I loved it all! :)

I like how this progresses like an internal monologue; disjointed thoughts, feelings, senses. Nice. I’m doing NaNo, too, though I doubt I’ll finish.