Wow that’s confusing. My brain hurts too =( Wait a second, I’ll read it through again. OK, done. And I think I get it now. An apostrophe in “spares” would be helpful.

Interesting, funny, and yet slightly scary concept. A horrific glance into the future, perhaps?

Although I liked the conversation itself, I thought the use of present tense made the piece slightly disjointed.

But still, a great entry into the challenge.
Abby x

Interesting, even thinking becomes mechanized. Sounds dreadful – and I definitely hope not a glance into the future. ;)

At first, like Abby, I didn’t quite understand it, but of course the ending cleared things up for me. The last lines had an odd chilling effect on me, and I was reminded of Fahrenheit 451 for some reason. The idea of humans not quite being humans is interesting. All in all, I liked it :)

I just saw your comment on the challenge page, and made the most surprised expression at my computer. Seems like you really got the message through to me, haha.

(let me mess with the tense and clear some things up. I try to stay away from “and then he said” and “she/he responded”. I try to represent how a person may affect a response, that may be what’s confusing?

It’s like Dick and Bradbury had a baby.

@Concerned: I get the Bradbury part…Dick?

I also realized I needed to add the word green, it opens much better.

Philip K. Dick. The dude who wrote all those books that are now movies.
A Scanner Darkly, Total Recall, Minority Report, Screamers, Blade Runner, Paycheck, Next, The Adjustment Burea, etc.

Granted, the books were all pretty different from the movies.

I should have known that, Blade Runner is my favorite movie. Maybe I need a recharge….

Much better in the past tense…have 5 pencils!
Abby x