Cool idea with the ‘jouled halo’. Comma in the first line could have been a full stop if you want to highlight the tension with short sentences. Their tragedy is written so well it’s pretty hilarious. ‘He amped out’ made me chuckle. As did the final line. So they’re both addicts. It’s cute that they’re helping each other through and I hope Zev doesn’t give up on Ora. Definately my favourite part so far. Keep em coming. Abby x
Cool idea with the ‘jouled halo’. Comma in the first line could have been a full stop if you want to highlight the tension with short sentences.
Their tragedy is written so well it’s pretty hilarious. ‘He amped out’ made me chuckle. As did the final line.
So they’re both addicts. It’s cute that they’re helping each other through and I hope Zev doesn’t give up on Ora.
Definately my favourite part so far. Keep em coming. Abby x
Abby (LoA)