I lived this for years, scary, I can totally relate.

For some reason, maybe it’s the way I’m reading it or reading into it, the exclamation dangles oddly there off the end of suicide, I would like to see a question mark there, in this situation it would be more accusatory than your exclamation.

Then again, it may simply be my perception.

I likes this!

Shit I feel the same way about these religious crazies blind in their own faith! I’m a devout agnostic personally and I often ? just what the hell these people believe.

Loved it! The first paragraph was beautiful and easy to relate, the second moreso poetic and lots of symbolism…then it kind of tapered off for me, but i like the boldness of ending on just the word Alone.

Very angry and challenging but without going off kilter or over the top. The message is pretty clear with maybe some room for interpretation. Great job spilling the emotion onto the page.

Isn’t true joy an escape, no matter how you find it? Granted, I do not think cutting nor drinking will give you true joy, but other than religion, perhaps one can find true joy in the small things in life, or dancing, or writing, or shopping, or helping a friend.

@elsha…exactly why i wrote this – because it gave me a brief moment of distraction through writing (which is my escape)
helping friends, in my experience, leads to depression.
true joy isn’t an escape – because if you find it in life then you don’t need to escape at all.

You can find it, but you can’t stay there for long. :) That’s why it’s an escape. It’s like a perfect dream, but you have to wake up.
In my experience, helping friends is lore like solving a complex puzzle or getting out of a maze. There are a lot of dead ends or bad solutions, but one exit. Don’t get lost in the puzzle yourself. Sometimes friends need to find their own way out.

All the feeling and emotion and meaning is so motherfracking epic it made me all twitchy. Damn, you are a good writer.

One thing I’d say is that the rhyme/line scheme goes a little out of whack towards the end of the second verse and confused me.

Other than that, girl you know I think your writing is the shiz….

I sound totalyy American in this comment. Probably cos I assosciate all this religious extremism to isolated America.