Bizarre and disturbing but effectively written from the viewpoint of this conflicted, distracted, and disturbed protagonist. You used the present tense well but had a lapse or two into past tense.
Five pencils for forcing me to do the math…. Nice story too; I’m glad I can’t fall asleep while sitting up.
Five pencils for forcing me to do the math….
Nice story too; I’m glad I can’t fall asleep while sitting up.