Based on the song, “The World is Calling,” By Johnny Clegg.

really interesting story line :)

Very, very beautiful. Ambitious sentence structure too – especially in the beginning. I kept thinking…‘this is gonna go gramatically wrong…it will!’ but you never did. You’re obviously very talented.

It’s a beautiful concept, and you put the song in there very well…all disguised and hidden with your loverly writing.

You have an error in tense. In the third paragraph, ‘know’ should be ‘knew’…I think =S.

Again…really cool concept, beautifully written. Very emotional. By the way I love the second last para the best! Gorgeous description, despite it’s brevity.
Abby x

@Abby Thanks so much! I greatly appreciate the kind words.

And good catch with the “know/knew.” It’s impossible to be one’s own editor. :)