This looks to be a really interesting story. I love how the characters are written. How the three we hear are so ditinctive that we might not even have needed to hear who said them we’d just know.

Ah, Doc. Your writing is so influential to me.

In the second paragraph I would suggest inserting a ‘had’ in between ‘he’ and ‘downed’.

So…another brilliant piece. I loved the first part and I’m really glad that you’ve done a sequel. It’s still funny, but the serious message behind it is starting to come through a little more.

Poor preacher. I’m liking his character more and more. He’s sort of cautious and a little afraid of Randon. This could be the beginnings of a very dynamic duo indeed.
Abby x

Is it a groan or a moan? I like the bloodied bible and the mystery here, but I think the strength of your characters and plot mean sometimes let the over-descriptions go (grace to match his bravado), that stuff is apparent by his talk, we’ll visualize it anyway just from “slender”.

Too many characters all seated around the room, two of them drunk and it took me a couple reads to dig through it all, rereading the prequel, to realize that the preacher was not one of them before you threw in the slender stranger. It’s just a swirling vortex for me. :) Your dialogue is awesome. Maybe I need to get some caffeine..